Tuesday, April 29, 2008

Lonesome without You.

Have you ever wondered how alone would I be?
While gazing at the moon and walking by the sea
While the gentle wind would play with the tresses of my hair
And the chilly breeze would freeze my salty, flowing tears
While the Mother Nature’s shower would be tapping at the pane
And I could hear the whistling of the distant trains
Have you ever wondered if what is solitary’s pain?
While I would pass by the sweet dwelling that we shared
The times when we had fought, and the moments when we cared
While I would feel affrighted by a terrifying nightmare
The times when I would be surrounded by the unseen fears
When there would be a winning, a time to celebrate
Or a phase of failure, a stroke of ill-fate
While the sonance of the silence would all that be heard
And the surrounding views would go on getting blurred
While the soul would lastly be liberated and set free
Will you then be wondering if how alone I had been?

34 comments:

nefariousoutlook said...

simple and well written!! and i guess being alone is not always bad :)

keyboardsculpturer said...

Good writing.
It is good to be alone.Loneliness dosen't meen left alone.Being in solitude is like going back to your vilage home,where everything,everyone , know instinctly how to leave you alone.Dear Writer, Loneliness is not the real problem but the crowd makes one feel lonely is the core issue.....
Best wishes and thanks for visiting Man in Painting.Do visit again

saif said...

nice post
i love to be alone

Anonymous said...

wooow ...stunning poem...u r really talented ...very emotional one

unpretentious_diva said...

Will you then be wondering if how alone I had been?

he/she may.

May be he/she will feel alone too.
Have you ever wondered how alone would he/she be?

Aravind said...

Awesome piece of writing.

Sometimes, i love to be alone.
It's then we get to know ourselves.

I'm a man of logical thinking and I try to reason everything i experince.
And i do that when i am alone.

Sarah, you've got great talent.
Hoping to read more from you.

Anonymous said...

I just have one word to describe this poem - beautiful..

Shayan said...

Hye Sarah, second time around here
:)

am impressed..keep up the good work

Trailblazer said...

Well written. Loneliness kills actually. But it's worthy for your thoughts.

logic said...

nice post...very emotional one..
keep it up

Naureen said...

beautiful :)
loved it :)

Sushant said...

brillaint ..is all I can say

Samuel Jackson said...

Very well written indeed!
As i see some previous comments, i don't think everyone will understand the true meaning of the scary word "loneliness". I think it's the most horrible feeling to be "alone". Anyways, Lonesome without you is the perfect title for the poem. Well done!! for such a good poem.

Scribbler said...

Very intense

impressive

keep it rollin;)

Lubaid said...

kpdoiSalams !
Well, good attempt sarah.
The poem did bind,it did appeal so you can safely assume, it's a piece, well written.
Do intimate incase you update your blog.
Allah hafiz

Vishwas said...

Sarah,

Really touching one...i know how it feels to be alone but trust me at times in the crowd you feel to go out and have some time for yourself.
But there are times when you feel alone in the crowd...one hopes for attention and does not get it...that loneliness hurts real bad...you hear the people but you don't get connected.

Great post keep writing

Vishwas

ataurrehmn said...

beautiful
loved it

speacially


"Lonesome without You."

farrukh: indian copywriter said...

Poetry straight from the heart... keep it up, Sarah...

farrukh
http://www.indiancopywriter.com

Shariq said...

hey..
i lost ur number and that extremely lengthy poem u sent me on my cell around a month back!! -- all thanks to a cellphone malfunction!

anyways.. wow.. i aint a poetry fan but thats some solid 'shairy' including the one u sent..!

keep it up.. bravo! =D

PS: oh and i had to google up ur blog to find u online!

- SHariq Munir!

Tyler Lovelace said...

Oh my god, I admire you.

Not only are you a great writer, but you've been blogging for only a few monthes, and actually have comments :P

I blogged on one site for well over a year, and never got anything -.-
So, I've switched to blogger.

But, yes, all your writings are very good.

Tess said...

These simple words were frighteningly beautiful! So serene and so sad and yet.....
wonderful!!!

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Muhammad Dawood Jan said...

Do not be surprised f the people that understand you are few

For dreams are your wings n your words are true

Vinayak said...

amazing poem!!!
gr8 work!!!
brilliant!!!
i am speechless but can say Brilliant!!!
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Abhinav Viswambharan said...

You indeed write beautiful poems, Sarah. Unlike the one's which go over the head. :)

Attila said...

wow.. u've been bookmarked sarah..

moud said...

very descriptive words for being lonely after losing someone u love..
it really hurts and hurts more when ppl can't understand ur pain
go on dear

Sarah Rahman said...

@ nefariousoutlook: True. It depends on the point in time one is going through...isn't it?

@ keyboardsculpturer: Truly agreed.

@ Saif: Would you like sharing the reason, Saif?

@ Aravind: Yes, Aravind. I do agree that we need to be alone at times so as to discover ourselves and the reason behind our own existence but the monotony of being alone gets depressing sometimes. Thank you for appreciating my work :)

@ Shayan: Thank you, again :)

@ Trailblazer: Agreed.

@ logic, Naureen, Sushant, Scribbler, Vishwas, Atta, Farrukh, Shariq, Tess, Rei, Vinayak, Abhinav, and Samuel: Thank you for appreciating it in your individual unique ways. I am glad to have wonderful readers like you.

@ Tyler: How is your experience coming along? Wish you all the best.

@ Muhammad Dawood Jan: I am happy to have you as one of my valued friends and thank you for leaving a wonderful comment.

@ Attila: Thanks a ton! :)

@ Moud: But you do understand, Moud. Thank you for being there.

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Anonymous said...

Buenas noches

It is my first post here wanted to say hi

See you later

Anonymous said...

Greetings

I just wanted to say hi :)

Anonymous said...

pretty cool stuff here thank you!!!!!!!

Anonymous said...

Wow all I can say is that you are a great writer! Where can I contact you if I want to hire you?

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